Sometimes the writing bug just *bites* you, and despite how you may have real life obligations (read: I'm supposed to be up in four hours), you cannot help but submit.
I've restored an older version of Ange and Nellwyn's chapter 1. The writing isn't nearly as sophisticated -- but the truth is, these are young girls who shouldn't have sophisticated writing. I've taken away poetic phrases, but I've put in two sisters who scrap with each other and rely on the other's opinion. They're much more real this way. Ange is idealistic and determind, and Nellwyn is trying her best to be Ange's guardian, despite a two year age difference. They're real, and so I know I'm on the right track.
I've got a few problems though -- namely, Ange has a vision, bears markings on her hand, and learns a powerful and secretive Stalfen phrase. These things are referenced later in the story, so there needs to be a place for this to happen. I shall confer with chapter 2.
In any case, I feel very good about this change. Characters, rather than ideas, are stepping forward. This is just what this book needs.
In other news, I'm reading the Fantasy book, The Blade Itself by Joe Abercrombie. Woo, is this a masculine book. 50 pages in and no female character whatsoever, not even referenced. Perhaps this is why entering Mereglen and observing the lives of two sisters is so pleasurable tonight.
~X
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